IELTS Online Class for Nurses
Ervin Nil Temporal, CEO 9.0 Niner: So greetings to everyone here on planet Earth. Greetings to all IELTS examinees worldwide. I'm Ervin a temporal the founder and CEO of 9.0 IELTS Review Center, initially based in the Philippines, but two years ago we have expanded our horizons and now we're offering online review program for all aspiring IELTS passwords worldwide. When we launched our online review program two years ago, I'm so happy that now we are able to accommodate more than 60 nationalities in six different continents.
First, I'd like to take this golden opportunity to thank Connetics USA Nursing for inviting us here to conduct free classes related to IELTS reading and IELTS writing. We've partnered with Connetics last year and we're so happy to help their nurses pass the IELTS examination, which is required for nurses to move to the United States of America. Before I introduce you to Sir Brian Martin Shawson, I'd like to announce that Connetics has a repair program. So if you know any nurse who is interested in going to the United States of America, all you have to do is to refer them to Connetics.
You can visit the Facebook page of Connetics. You can also visit their website or send them an email. They are very professional and very responsive. That is why we are very grateful that Connetics partnered with a 9.0 Niner. So what is in store for everyone tonight? We are doing a Facebook Live session featuring on the spot IELTS writing. Yes, you heard us right.
Sir Brian Martin Shawson will be making an essay for you on this spot. I am so happy because we were given the opportunity to discuss the different kinds of topics that frequently come out in IELTS writing.
So my request for you guys, if you could please tag your friends, ask them to join us during this Facebook Live session because it's supposed to be interactive. Yes, we are going to upload the recorded version of this one on the Connetics Facebook page. It's just that it's an entirely different story when you are present and you interact with us, because this is not supposed to be a monologue, it's supposed to be a dialogue.
So here with us tonight is Sir Brian Martin Shawson. Just to give you an idea, Ryan Martin Shawson took English examinations. The first step, he took IELTS academic module way back in 2009. And then he took another examination. This time it's PTE, or Pearson Test of English. And for his third IELTS, he took IELTS general training. If his first IELTS was IELTS on paper, his second IELTS was IELTS on computer.
So now what were the grades that Brian Martin Shawson got for IELTS? He got overall band score of 9.0, speaking 90, riding 90, reading 90, listening 90. That means to say he is a cut above the rest. Definitely a diamond of the first water. Considering that he got the perfect grade of 9.0 in all IELTS components for his second examination, which is PT or Pearson Test of English, what grades did he get for the fourth subtest? Listening, Reading, Writing, Speaking, 90 over 90.
For other components, namely fluency, pronunciation, vocabulary, grammar, he also got perfect 90 over 90. This is the reason why we decided to pick Sir Brian Martin Shawson to be the featured lecturer for tonight.
And because we are part of Connetics College, we are doing this every month. So, once again, thank you Connetics for having us 9.09%. We are assigned every fourth Monday of the month.
Now, let's take a look at the composition of our live attendees. Right now, we have 67 live viewers on Facebook. Kindly use the comment section. Kindly indicate your location before I turn you over to Sir Brian.
Let's take a look. So far, we have harshly Maverick. He is watching from Cebu City, Philippines. Hello there. Ms. Joyce Ramireo is also watching us tonight and she's based in Kazan City, Philippines.
What about the others? Kindly use the comment section of our Facebook Live session. Let us know where you are from so that we can greet you. Thank you so much, Ms. Melanes, for always assisting us. She's the person behind all of Connetics College live sessions, and if not because of her, this event or this project of Connetics would not have been successful. Thank you so much, Ms. Melanes, and good evening to you.
What about the other attendees? Okay, Leonil Lapore is based in Libya, Africa. I guess it's still afternoon in Africa right now. Hello there. Good afternoon, Leonil. Mark Louis Rojas Aranetta is from Cagayan de Oro City in the Philippines. Well, we have an international market for tonight, an international class because Imran Sied is based in Kuwait. Hello there, Imran Sier.
Good afternoon. Ken Initsu is from Pinta Rizal, Philippines. Mary Carnegoles is from Bacola City. Well, I look at the locations of the other attendees. Will you please tag your friends so that they can suggest possible writing topics sir Brian will use as basis when he comes up with a writing task or an essay on the spot. You heard me right. So guys, this is not scripted, not memorized, because we want the topic to come from you. Who else? We have Yam Busran from Kagayan de Oro City, Philippines. Ms. Cherry Lynn Carolina de la Cruz is also joining us from the United Arab Emirates.
Good afternoon, Middle East Bernard Dindo Anicete is also watching us from Doha, Qatar. Good afternoon to you. Over there in Qatar. Ryan Haronimo is based in Abu Dhabi, United Arab Emirates. So we have representatives from the Philippines, the Middle East and Africa.
What about the rest of the world? Do we have anyone who is based in the United States or the Caribbean or Europe or the Pacific or Oceania? Please let us know so that we can greet you during this Facebook Live session. Right now we have 96 live viewers. So Kylie, tag your friends, because this is just once a month opportunity.
It's not every day that Sir Brian and I are together in one frame. What about the others? Chris Vincent Branzuela is watching from Cebu City, Philippines. Jam Dominguez Dumaging is from Dubai, United Arab Emirates. We also have another representative from the Middle East. It's IRA from Muscat, Oman. Janice Zamora is watching from Pangasinan, Philippines. And the Acosta, who also like me, lives in Pasay City, Philippines. Yana Vincent is currently in Cavite and he is attending the live IELTS class of Sir Phillip. Ms. Melanes is based in Misamis Oriental. I thought Ms. Milan is based in Quezon City and she's based from Ms. Ames. I guess both of us are Visa.
We come from the southern part of the Philippines. Maayong Gabi. Ms. Milan Maayong Gabi, Mindanao. Christian Fall. Adlawan hinakai is also from Davao City. My hometown. Kpoplibar is from Riyadh.
Thank you Andy, for tagging your friend. Maureen is from Dam, kingdom of Saudi Arabia. Hasem Alumari is from Qatar. Hello there. Oh, we have a representative from Nigeria. Hello, Ms. Ivory, Czechwas, javit radilia Apuhan is watching from Cavide.
Rosario Ruiz is watching from Singapore. And we have Choy Zartiga watching from Canada. Guess what? Now we have 172 live viewers. So please keep on tagging your friends so that they are going to join us for tonight's live session. Before I tell you the top five most common topics in IELTS writing that you're supposed to read about now, I'll ask Sir Brian Martin Shawson to introduce himself and perhaps a few words before we talk about the top five topics in IELTS writing.
Good evening, Sir Brian Shawson good evening, Sir Ervin. And thank you so much for that very warm introduction. Hi guys, and thank you so much for attending this session.
My name is Brian. I'm one of the lectures of 9.9 IELTS Review and Tutorial Center. I've been teaching IELTS for more than ten years. I started in 2010. It's 2022 now, so it's almost twelve years over a decade of teaching IELTS. I also teach PT and OET as well. And one of the things that you should know about me is that I actually got pretty decent course in these examinations. And that's all because of the techniques, the strategies, and the different things that I have learned or gleaned from 9.9 or. I also review a tutorial center. Indeed, our techniques really work.
So hopefully during this session, you'll invite a lot of your friends and tag a lot of your friends so that they can also benefit from this free session. This is absolutely free. So they can join and they can learn with us tonight and be able to also have a few takeaways from this lesson on how to write for IELTS writing. Right Ervin. Yes, as promised, we'll be identifying six winners for tonight. So I'll identify three winners and later, Sir Brian will announce his three winners. So what are the possible prices that the active and participative attendees can win? Four tonight?
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Now, what's option number two is something that you don't get to have regularly. One on one coaching with me or one on one coaching with Sir Brian. So you get to pick who among the two of us would you like to have the one on one session with? Something common for both of us. We have taken the IELTS twice.
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So without further ado, let me introduce you to the top five topics that come out in IELTS writing. So are you ready to find out what these top five topics are? Well, if you have your pen and paper with you, it's best that you take notes. So, number one, a very common topic that comes out every month people and society. So read up on topics that are related to culture or the community, the society, how people interact with each other, because I tell you, that is a very common topic and IELTS writing tasks to now, are you ready for the second most common topic? It's none other than education. So we need you to read up on topics related to libraries, museums, schools, teachers, students, pupils, because definitely that is a common topic in IELTS writing.
Now, what about number three? It's technology. So what are the subtopics? Under the general category of technology, they include number one, information. Number two, communication. And number three, transportation. I guarantee that these three topics come out every single month It's just that there are also other writing topics that come out in the IELTS. And what are they?
Number four, it's politics, economics. So anything related to the government or policies, laws, rules, regulations. That's a very common topic in IELTS writing. What about the fifth one? It's environment.
So please do not get me wrong. I am not saying that you're just supposed to limit yourself to these five topics because like what I've said, they are the most common, but there are also other topics.
Now, my challenge for you guys is to read up on these five topics. If I may borrow the famous line of our fellow 9.9 lecturer, sir Philip Edward Ituna. He said, you cannot give what you do not have. So more than anything else, you have to read to feed your mind.
Now, before I turn you over to Sir Brian, let me take a look first at the comments here on the chat box. Wow. Right now we have 229 live viewers worldwide. Let's take a look at the comments of the attendees. The majority of the people here are tagging their friends. Oh, yes. If you are active, if you are participating,if you ask questions, you'll be one of the six lucky winners for tonight. Fernando Apaitan Sibeyan is watching from the Kingdom of Saudi Arabia. Mitch Makarana's Concept Shaun is watching from Dubai, United Arab Emirates.
Who else do we have here? Thank you, others, for tagging as many friends as they can. Let me just check the comments. Okay. Marshalin Oliva Deniega is watching from San Jose City Nueva Is. Hello there. Okay, Colleen de La Cruz. Type it for the benefit of all our 223 live viewers for tonight. She just typed the most common topics and what are they? Their culture, education, technology, politics, or economics and environment. Thank you, Colleen. So that the other live viewers who missed that part are now able to take note of the most common topics.
Sheila Maria is watching from the United Arab Emirates. Nicole Gonzalez is from Makati. Christine is from Alhasa, Saudi Arabia. Okay. Luella Labelle is watching from Illoe. Eli Domingo is watching from Tripoli, Libya. Roda Camara Medina is from Riad. Novargara is from Kingdom of Saudi Arabia.
Now, I'd like to ask you guys, which particular specific writing topic would you like Sir Bryan to write about? Like what we have said, we did not prepare anything. So what did you notice? You're not seeing any PowerPoint presentation, no outlines. We're just relying on our mouth because we want you to provide us the question. And Sir Brian is going to come up with the writing task. So do you have any suggestions? What would you like Sir Bragging to write about? Please focus on writing tasks to essay writing because that's what we're going to have for tonight. If you want to Brian to write a statistical
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All you have to do is to visit this one Conneticsusa.com/referral, very easy to remember. So kindly visit the website and the Facebook pages of Connetics. Or you can also send them an email. Now, let's take a look at the topics here. I guess the first one to type is chardie Lynn Carolino de la Cruz. And Sherry Lynn Carolino de La Cruz is suggesting that Sir Bryan writes something about education. Sir Brian, do you have a specific question in mind related to education, or would you like me to take a specific question related to education? What do you think, Sir Brian? Yeah, sir, education is a fairly common topic that comes out in the IELTS. You can think of a very good question to answer about education, right?
So any question about education, sir, will be fine. Okay, so here's a specific question. What are the effects of Internet to students? So perhaps you can focus on the advantages or the positive effects. You can also talk about the disadvantages or the negative effects. Okay, way to go, Sir Brian. Martin Shawson is going to write an essay or a paragraph related to the effects of Internet due to students.
So, , take it away. Okay. Hello, ladies and gentlemen, everyone who's attending this session. Before I start with on the spot writing task, I would want to introduce you first with the process of writing something. And that is very important because IELTS is not just a linear process. It actually involves a lot of different stages. It's not something that you can write straight away and you can't just look at the question and start composing your response right away. You need to first repair. So you need to make sure that you outline carefully and prepare what you're going to write next. You're going to write and never forget to proofread or edit your paper.
So there are three stages in the writing process, and you need to follow all of them religiously because there's a tendency for some people to skip one of the stages. And the result of that is that you get too slow at writing things and you're not able to produce something that is worthwhile or something that is efficiently written. So if you want something that is really well put together, organized, and also something that is efficiently completed, you have to make sure to follow that process. So let me just go ahead and share my screen.
Just a moment, guys. It's my first time to actually use StreamYard. All right? So let me go ahead and share my screen. Okay. Share screen works best on a good computer. Okay. Alright. So let me just share my screen. Just the window. Okay. There you go. I think that's going to do the trick. All right. So there you go. The question, Sir Ervin, is about the effect of the Internet on the academic performance, perhaps, or on students in general. Right?
So I would want to change that question into something that's closer to what IELTS is going to look like. And IELTS questions will actually take on the form of different instructions. So, for example, we have do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion. We have to what extent do you agree or disagree? Discuss both use, give your opinion open ended questions. And we also have do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
So for this session, I would want to go with the first type of question and the write something like, some people say that the Internet negatively, or maybe social media, social media negatively or the use of various social media platforms negatively impacts students in many ways.
Do you agree or disagree with this statement and give your opinion? All right, so there you go. This is your question. Please think, guys. Right. So I'm going to be looking at the comments section. The question is, some people say that the use of various social media platforms negatively impacts students in many ways.
Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion. I want you to tell me, guys, what do you think about this? Do you agree with this or do you disagree with this statement that social media generally impacts students negatively? So for those who agree, just probably hit the hard button. And for those who disagree, just the like button so that we'd be able to monitor the responses more easily on Facebook. Right? So just heart for agree and like for disagree. I'm seeing more hearts. It seems as if many people agree that social media is destructive to people who are studying.
All right? Okay. So yeah, it doesn't really matter whether you are writing a positive or negative opinion. It doesn't really matter. Your opinion doesn't matter. What matters is that you're able to defend your stand. You're able to justify your stand. Okay? Right. So since many of you agree that social media can negatively impact students in many ways, I would want to start with the outlining process. I'll create the table right here. his is also what we do in class here at niners.
So just in case you're interested to enroll, you'll be able to see me writing like this every time we do the writing program or any other similar class for that matter. So usually we write the argument, the reasons, the examples, and also probably the effect of that for example, if you have thought of a particular argument, you would have to defend or write the supporting argument for it by asking the question why? And then you're going to be supplying some examples and also some impacts or effects for that matter. Okay. So let's start first with your arguments for those people who agree.
Why do you think is it negatively impacting students in many ways? What aspects of a student's life is being affected by social media? Let me look at the comments section. Please contribute, guys, because as you participate, you get the chance of winning. Right? So please take some time to type your comments and let us know why. All right, so I'm looking at the comments section. Let's wait for people. Right, so yes, one is the get false information. So this is actually misinformation. Can you give me another one? It affects their mental health. I will accept that. Okay, all right. But I'm looking at other arguments. If you have other arguments to write, there are six lucky winners for tonight.
So Elizabeth is saying that social media is promoting the spread of false information. Okay, so that's fake news. Yeah. It can be a distraction for people like TikTok right. And all of those social media platforms. So this can be too poor academic performance, I would say, because they are distracted. So yeah, I will put that right there. Distracted by their addiction to social media. Can you give me some examples of social media platforms that are highly addictive?
Can you give me some examples of those sites that can be heavily addictive? All right, so Ronda is saying it gives the illusion or social media may cause a distraction. Yes. Charity, I agree with you. Right. So most of the time that the students are supposed to be spending studying will be instead shifted towards using social media sites or accessing social media sites. Yes.
All right, so what examples do you have? Yes, we have TikTok. Yes. We have Facebook. Hopefully this is educational because we're on Facebook right now, so hopefully this is an educational session and not one that is going to affect your academic performance. Yes. YouTube. Yeah, this is also a social media platform. YouTube can be addictive. Yes. Especially those that have videos. Right, okay, so we have three different examples here. So what happens if the students have four academic performance? They're easily distracted and their focus and attention are shifted towards social media sites? What happens to the students? What is the impact of this to the students? All right, so they get what okay. What happens to them? We're still seeing some examples of some sites Instagram. Yes.
Okay, so what is the effect of this on their academic performance? So what happens to them generally in terms of their academic performance? Okay, you're so witnesser Brian. Okay, thank you so much. right? So yeah, it might cost them to get failing marks. Right. So ultimately to have lower rates, less focus and attention on their classes in school and overall lower level of learning. All right, so there you go. Great. Good job, guys. So as you can see here, we have already been able to arrive at the first paragraph. Okay. So this is going to be your first paragraph already. So the next one is going to be about misinformation, and that's going to be another paragraph. Okay. So why is it that there's misinformation? It promotes misinformation. Social media sites promote misinformation because there's plenty of fake news you've mentioned a while ago. Right. And it's very difficult, especially for young ones right. Especially for young students, to filter information and determine which ones are reliable and which ones are not. Okay, right. So can you give me some examples, guys, of the types of misinformation or the types of information that this falls that you can get from the Internet. Okay, so can you give me some example? Yeah. There are no reliable sources. Right. Okay, what else? Biased report or reporting unverified information. Yes, I will accept that. Thank you so much for all of your contributions. All right. Even the death of some personality.
So actually you can put all of those under the umbrella of unverified information or not having reliable sources. Okay. All right, there you go. What happens to students as a learner or as a pupil? What happens to you if you are fed with misinformation? All right, so be it about current events, science, history, or any other subject for that path, or what happens to children if they are fed with misinformation. Okay. What is the effect of this? Yeah, so there are a lot of blogs people are saying here what's that, Colleen? Yeah, there are lots of blogs logs in which they feature information that is not reliable. Right. They have bias reporting. They haven't verified information. Yeah. This can actually lead to misconception on the part of students okay. And ultimately result in confusion and ignorance. All right.
So there you go. You have some very strong words right there. I'm very impressed. Okay. So, see, we actually spent around five minutes working on this outline, but that's actually okay because it's a very good investment. So always remember that when you're writing, if you have a good outline, you will be able to execute the task more efficiently. So are you ready? We're going to start writing now, guys. All right. So what you need to do here is to follow a particular structure. And here at 9.09, we have different structures or different ways of writing for different types of questions. I cannot discuss all of them in this very short session, but I'm going to discuss how you're going to write for agree or disagree, give your opinion.
So you will have to write an introduction. You will have to present your stand. After that, you will have to write your reasons and your examples in the body and you will have to write your conclusion at the end. The introduction shouldn't be a creative intro, just keep it simple. All you need to do with the introduction is basically to paraphrase your task description, that is precisely the reason that I'm copying and pasting the task description here because we're just going to change this up a little bit and that's going to be our introduction already.
Okay, ready? All right. So let's time ourselves to 834. Let's get started with this task. Some people say we could probably write, there are individuals who hold the belief using various social media platforms or various accessing a number of social media sites can negatively, in fact have very grave consequences on the part of students. Also hold the same belief. Okay, so let's just change hold the belief here who are of opinion, all right, that accessing a number of social media sites can have very great consequences on the part of students. Let's just ignore this grammatical area right there. Okay? Let's move on to the next paragraph. This is your intro already, just your paraphrase task description and your stand and then you can proceed right away with your first beer wrap of the body and all you need to do is to follow your plan. So the first argument that you have here is that it leads to poor academic performance.
One of the negative effects of using social media especially, or habitually, maybe habitually, is that it can result in poorer academic performance as students get distracted by what they see online, especially on certain websites, websites that can be addictive, right. Their time that should otherwise be spent on studying is shifted towards menial or trivial, all right, trivial aspects or trivial topics or social media site activities, such as the case with the use of various popular and prominent social media platforms as TikTok, Facebook, YouTube and Instagram.
Because of the over indulgence of students in the use of these sites, they tend to have lower rates, lower amount of focus and attention, or a lower degree of focus and attention on their classes in school. And overall, it's strikingly a Porter level of learning. Okay, so there you go. We're done with the first paragraph. I'm going to just edit this later. And overall yeah, right.
So let's move on to the next paragraph. When you're writing, you shouldn't edit a lot, you should edit after because there's always a tendency for you to write and then cross out the entire thing. It's a waste of time. So let's move on. In addition, social media be a medium for the spread of misinformation, especially among the youth, right?
Fake news and fake news about most social media sites. And it is very difficult, especially for young students, to filter information and determine which ones are reliable and which ones are not. Okay. For instance, there are now many blogs and Facebook videos, right, that contain unreliable information from unknown sources or feature news articles that are heavily biased to favor a particular personality or political party. All right. This is not to mention that most of the information or most of the information that children see online is unverified. And this can span from current events technology, science and technology, science and technology, history and others.
This misconception on the part of students can ultimately result in confusion and ignorance, which they can carry with them even in adulthood. Right, okay. Even when they're already adults. Even when they're already even when they are already adults. Okay, now let's move on to the conclusion we're done. In conclusion, although many young people or students today make use of social media as a form of recreation okay, and a way to pass or to entertain themselves, I am of the belief or am of the view that this has very alarming consequences that can affect not only what are the things that we wrote here. The first one is poor academic, their academic performance, but also their view of life in general. Okay, we're done. But this is just one sentence. I'll just make it a couple of sentences. Right? Okay. So many people, blah, blah, blah. And then I'm going to use however I'm of the view all right, there you go. I'm finished. It's 842.
So we spent only eight minutes writing this entire thing. Okay. So we now have enough time for us to edit our writing task. For example, again, we just spent eight minutes writing this entire essay. So we're going to go and start from the top. Let's look at it from afar. So you can see. All right. So you can see here, this is visible. Yes. You can see right here that it looks pretty nice. It looks very organized. It looks as if it's well written, but we're going to still edit. Okay, so give me some time to edit. Right, so let's start. There are individuals who have the opinion that accessing a number of social media sites can have very grave consequences on the part of students. I also hold the same belief.
One of the negative effects of using social media habitually is that it can result in poor academic performance, especially among students, as they get distracted, but by what they see online, especially on certain websites that can be addictive. Their time that should otherwise be spent on studying is shifted towards trivial activities, such as the case with the use of various popular and prominent social media platforms as TikTok, Facebook, YouTube, and Instagram. Because of the overindulgence of students in the use of these sites, they tend to have lower rates, a lower degree. This is lower already.
So this is going to have to be changed because you don't want to repeat the word so closely. They tend to have far from stellar grades, a lower degree of focus and attention in their classes. And overall, there should be a comma right here. And overall, a strikingly poor level of learning. Okay. In addition, social media can be a medium for the spread of misinformation, especially among the youth fake news about we need to use a bounce most social media sites, and it is very difficult, especially for young students, to filter information and determine which ones are reliable and which ones are not.
For instance, there are now many blogs and Facebook videos that contain unreliable information from unknown sources for feature news articles that are heavily biased to favor a particular personality or political party. This is not to mention that most of the information that children see online is unverified, and this can span from current events, science and technology, history, and others.
This misconception on the part of students can ultimately result in confusion and ignorance, which they can carry with them even when they are already adults. In conclusion, many young people or students today make use of social media as a form of free creation and a way to entertain themselves.
However, I'm of the view that this has very alarming consequences that can affect not only their academic performance, but also their view of life in general. All right, so now let's go and write the word count here. I'm not sure if I can see the word count. Just give me a moment. It is 332 words. And this is actually perfect for your examination because you just want to write about 200 and 7320 words, not more than 350 in your examination because it's harder to edit something that's very long.
There you go, guys. And you can probably take a photo of this one. This is our actual sample for your IELTS rating task, too. So let's look at the comments. There you go. See, it's very easy. And we just spent four minutes editing this. So accounting everything. Five minutes for planning, eight minutes for writing. That's 13 minutes. Plus four minutes. That's 17 minutes. Can you imagine?
We still have 23 minutes for writing task, too. And we can just relax and just look at our work revise and polish. And definitely that's going to give you an extra test because you could do everything so efficiently. All right, so there you go, guys. You can take a picture of our sample. And also, more importantly, you can take a picture of our outline because this is actually the most important thing that you are able to write a good outline. Because as you can see, we didn't write anything new.
Everything that we wrote, we actually planned beforehand. Okay, so, sir, we're looking at all of the comments right now. I'll ask Sir Brian to look at the comments section because I need Sir Brian to identify three winners. As I've said, we're going to identify a total of six winners for tonight. I'll identify three. Well, Sir Brian is going to identify three, so you still have time because we have not yet decided who the winners are. All you have to do is to tag your friends, because we usually pick the winners from the most active participants coming from our live viewers.
Let me double check with Ms. Melanes and Ms. Jennifer how many minutes we are actually allotted for this free or bonus IELTS class with Connetics College? So before Sir Brian is going to identify his three winners, I'd like to comment on what he just did. First things first. A lot of people find writing to be very challenging because they are afraid of the subject thinking that it's rocket science or you have to write like Shakespeare. But IELTS is not like that. The point of the writing sub. This is to get your point across, not to impress, but to express. If you read the output of Sir Brian, he did not use fancy or overwhelming words that are quite condescending. In fact, what he used were simple words that are easy to understand. And that is the point of the writing subdivision. Now, you might be thinking, isn't it, that I'm supposed to gravitate towards big words because this is IELTS writing?
No, that is not correct. Why people have this pension for big words because it sounds what? It sounds fancy. I just want to remind everyone that what Sir Brian Martin Shawson did is actually the kind of output that meets the standards of the examiners. Well, you're going to tell me, Oh, it's just a float. But I tell you, it is not a mean feat if someone gets the perfect grade in writing in two out of three attempts at the second highest in his third attempt. So, just to give you an idea, Brian Martin Shawson took Pte or Pearson Test of English once, IELTS twice, one IELTS academic, one IELTS General Training, one IELTS on paper and one IELTS on computer. But for PT, he got the perfect 90 over 90 for essay writing. In IELTS writing, he got perfect 9.0 in one attempt, 8.5 in writing in another attempt.
Now, you might want to ask what are the most important criteria the examiners are looking at in your performance? Let's identify the four. The first one is Task Response. The second one is Coherence and Cohesion. The third one is Electrical Resource. And the fourth one is Grammatical Range and Accuracy.
Let us begin with a Task Response. You ask yourself the following questions if you want to know if you are going to get a fair or actually a high grade. For the first criterion, the first question you must ask yourself is your output finished? In the case of Sir Brian Martin Shawson, he just wrote his essay in eight minutes. It took him four minutes to edit, five minutes to plan for it.
So the entire writing task was completed in 17 minutes. That actually gives him more than enough time for his writing task one, or if he wants to go back to his output change the other words he has all the time in the world because he was able to finish his writing task on time.
Now, the second question you must ask yourself, is the essay complete? Is there an introduction? Is there a body? And is there a conclusion? It's not hanging.
Now, if you're going to look at the slide that we have right here, it's complete. Right there is proper closure. Now, the most important question did Sir Brian Martin Shawson answer the question? The answer is obviously yes. It's an agree or disagree type of question, which is, by the way, one of the four writing questions that come out in the actual examination. And what are the four? As I typed earlier on the comments section, do you agree or disagree? Number two, discuss both views. Number three, do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
And number four, it's open ended no. For agree or disagree, what's essential? You have to pick a stand, whether you agree or disagree, and mention it right away in the introduction. And that is exactly what Sir Brian Martin Shawson did. Right in the first paragraph, he indicated I also hold the same belief.
Notice he did not use the words I agree and I disagree. Why? In my last 15 years of teaching IELTS, I have met more than 20 IELTS examiners, and one important lesson that I have learned during their workshop, a lot of people overuse the word agree and disagree. The goal of candidates is to express their sad without using the overused words of agree and disagree. Now, in your body, you're supposed to write two or three paragraphs that focus on your stance. And that's exactly what Sir Brian Shawson did here. He thought of arguments, reasons, examples, and so what? To defend his stand at the same time? For a task response, it's important to ask yourself, did I write examples? Looking at the output of Sir Brian Martin Shawson here there are specific examples, namely TikTok, Facebook, YouTube, Instagram.
These are examples that must be present in your output because lack of examples will definitely pull you down. Now for the second criterion, which is Coherence and cohesion. This is the one that assesses the organization, the flow of your essay. Notice that Sir Brian did not write more than four or more than five sentences per paragraph. At the same time, he limits one paragraph to just one central idea.
Now, the moment you feel that you're supposed to write a totally new idea, you're supposed to allot an entirely different paragraph for that one. At the same time, Sir Brian may use up connective words. If you will notice he used words like such as in addition, for instance, in conclusion, these are words that ensure a smooth flow from the beginning to the conclusion.
What about lexical resource? The first thing that you have to remember, the words must be correct more than anything else. It's the choice, the usage of words. But what about number two, it's not enough that the words are correct. The words must also be varied.
Earlier, what did you notice when Sir Brian was editing? When he noticed that there were repetitions, he thought of an alternative. Now, if you cannot think of exactly one word to replace that one, say, for instance, the word lower, he thought of something else, right? He replaced it with far from stellar. So that is one suggestion.
You build your vocabulary, because the more words that, the faster you can finish the examination without repeating exactly the same words. Now, someone asked me, so what if it comes to a point that we don't have a choice but to repeat exactly the same word?
Well, what is it that I've learned from senior IELTS experts in my last 15 years of attending local and international English language assessment conferences? According to examiners, the repetition must happen very few and far in between. It must only happen when you have exhausted all the words pertaining to that particular concept.
What about grammatical range and accuracy? Sir Brian made sure that the subject and verb agree with each other. The tense is consistent from beginning to end. If you start with press and tense, it has to be press and tense all throughout the paragraph. The moment you start with a past tense, it has to be past tense for that paragraph.
Now, Sir Brian also made sure that his prepositions are accurate. So instead of forcing yourself to learn about complicated words, why don't you just learn how to use in, at, on, by, with two forward, from, and so on. Most importantly, Sir Brian sentences were not short. And shortly he made it the point that the sentences are a little bit complex. That the basic or average grade school or high school sentence. No wonder why he was able to finish everything in eight minutes, plus another five minutes For outlining, four minutes for editing. And what about his output? It's as clean as a whistle.
So now, if you're going to ask me what grade I'm going to give Sir Brian for this output, remember when he took his IELTS twice? 9.018.5. That means to say this output also serves eight, five to 9.0. Let me just take a look at the comment section. If Ms. Melanes or Ms. Jennifer responded to my question of how many minutes we are provided for this session, I'm not sure if it's 45 minutes or 1 hour, but I think it's 856 already. We've been talking for 56 minutes already. Nothing to worry, because next month we'll be doing exactly the same on the spot writing. But that time around, we're going to do writing task one, academic writing. So think of a line graph, a bar graph, pie chart table, or a map or a diagram, or actually, it can be a combination of any of those.
Now, before Sir Brian is going to announce his winners, let me once again take this golden opportunity to thank everyone at Connetics College the CEO, Ms. Tanya Freedman, who is very professional and responsive all the time, and the lady behind this. This is the brain shot of Ms. Luciana Da Silva, marketing Director of Connetics. I also would like to thank Ms. Jennifer, the IELTS support specialist, Ms. Melanes, who is in charge of the Technical. To everyone at Connetics, thank you for allowing us to conduct a free class like this, and we're looking forward to more free sessions with you guys.
But before we announce the lucky winners for tonight's free class, do not forget to visit the website up Connetics. At the same time, for those of you who are in the United States already and you would like to refer remember Conneticsusa.com/application. That's where you're supposed to go to if you want to apply with Connetics USA Nursing. But what if you want to refer someone? What is the link? It's Conneticsusa.com/referral. Now, do we have questions from the attendees?
Let me take a look. Okay, so Ms. Jennifer and Ms. Melanes responded that we have 1 hour, and I guess that's 58 minutes. So we have two minutes left for our free IELTS class with Connetics College.
Sir Brian, do you have your winners already? Yes, sir, I have chosen the winners based on the people that you have tagged. I chose Jesse Bell Tolentino first winner. Congratulations. Jesse Bell, congratulations. You are the first winner of Sir Brian Martin Shawson.
Will you please message me directly on my personal Facebook account? Because I'm going to ask you, which of these prices would you like to have? Would you like to have the unlimited review program? Would you like to have one on one coaching with me or with Sir Bryan? Or would you like to win either of the two, the IELTS speaking book or the IELTS writing book? And both of them are available on shopping,
Philippines and Amazon in six continents worldwide. So that's the first winner. What about the second winner, sir Del Dumugo. Del Dumugo, congratulations. I'll be waiting for your message. And, Sir Brian, let me request, if you could, please take note of your winners so that I'm going to verify if indeed they are the ones, because sometimes they message me, hey, I'm one of the winners, and I double check the list, so you're actually not one of them. So sorry. Better luck next time. Nothing to worry. We do this every month.
Okay, thanks to Connetics College. And what about the third winner coming? I noticed that this person, sir, actually participated a lot during the discussion, and she also tagged a lot of her friends.
The third webinar is Sherry Lynn Carolina de la Cruz congratulations. And I noticed that as well. She commented a lot, and her most recent comment, my question, Sir Ervin and Sir Ryan, how to be you? Well, it's not as if we started talking or we started writing like this since yesterday. The best way to prepare for the IELTS is to treat this not as an examination, but to treat this as part of your daily living. When you think in English, when you write in English, when you talk in English, it becomes as natural as breathing. It will have a ripple effect, domino effect. Everything will follow. Do not think of this as an examination, because the more that you think of it that way, you will be suffocated. Just think that you're having a casual conversation with your best friend, or you're writing as if you are just operating in the operating room, or you're just doing some procedures while you're working in the emergency room.
Now it's time for me to announce my winners. And the first one is none other than Ms. Akusta. So why did I take her? In fact, she was one of those who initially mentioned what topic Sir Brian can actually write about. At the same time, she was the one who gave the very specific question, what are the effects of the Internet to the young students? Whether they are positive effects or negative effects, nothing to worry if you want us to tackle technology or education or let's say, environment or health other topics, we can always do this every month, because, like what I've said, the fourth Monday of the month is allotted to 9.9. The second Monday of the month is Swoosh. First and third Monday of the month, let me say Dr. Paul Biluan for his free and collect classes. Now, my second winner is none other than Lab Lee Husay congratulations, Lab Lee Husay. I'll be waiting for your message. And the third one, she's actually very active, not just for this particular Facebook Live session, but during my recent Facebook Live session. She was also tagging her friends, and she's frequently commenting. And if I'm not mistaken, if my memory serves me right, she or he is based in India.
The third winner is Francheska Talikan. So there you go. My three winners are Akusta Lab Lee Husay, and Francheska Talikan. Congratulations to the six winners for tonight. Okay, yeah, it's 09:02 p.m.. By the way, let me just highlight this one. The Connetics USA offers IELTS and NCLEX sponsorship program. If you're not yet affiliated with any IELTS review center and you'd like to apply under Connetics, well, Connetics is actually sponsoring the IELTS review or of their applicants. All you have to do is to look for Ms. Jennifer. I'm certain that she will assist you in the same way that she has extended all possible support to the other applicants of Connetics. No wonder why Connetics is considered the top agency for us bound nurses. Okay, I guess we don't have anything else to say, and it's 1 hour already. Once again, thank you, Ms. Tanya. Thank you, Ms. Luciana. Thank you, Ms. Melanes. Thank you, Ms. Jennifer.Once again, this is Ervin Temporal and sir.Bryan Martin Shawson.Thank you for your time. We'll see you in our next Facebook live session. We'll see you in our next Connetics College Class. Good night, everyone. God bless. Bye.